Dope little match up, didn't see this happening in here!
Ullr: Your verse was solid enough, weirdly it reminded me of, well, me... similar style with the dual schemes running concurrently throughout. It's a lot different from what I normally associate with you from your long bar efforts. It was good to see you stepping out from that comfort zone and trying something a little different and more condensed to appeal to the shortbar crowd here, but I honestly also felt like it took away from some of your usual mechanics and technical merit. Your cadence, too, seemed to suffer a little from doing this i thought. Its usually one of your huge pluses but it lost something in transition here. I'm not exactly sure how to put my finger on it? Lines like this one are more 'you' if that makes sense:
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Reflections, a grunt in reply! The gods must be listening and this their sustenant prize.
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I agree with @pharoahs army in so much as you outdid yourself here, it lacked that 'natural' feel to it. Almost tried to hard is the impression I got and it really took away from your content and the imagery you usually convey.
Split: Unorthodox style, reminded me of Listen/chicken's old battle verses (old RB head, you prob wouldnt remember him or care lol) but it really pulled together nicely. I was pleasantly surpised. You weave words together so well, killed the fuckery out of this verse!
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there's beauty in the soft of decay.
boston. in plain, plastic bags and
rained acid splashes. smog. summer haze.
the bay laps up the ashes. but only cause nature
lacks any formal expression for human disgust.
so the fauna conducts a foray into the ruins of rust,
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I really felt that section, strong and fine tuned wording to it, great descriptive tone as well. I wasn't so keen on the "bluing" of guns that followed, but yeah, i'm with Pharoah on this one. Dr. Dog just appealed more to me as a writer, there's no mistaking his technical merit and how well his writers voice and imagery were executed here. One of the best verses I've read from dude in a hot minute!
Vote - Dr. Dog