Imma true player tho, gotta beat the girls off with a stick...
While u should stick to beating off to girls who don't even know u exist.
^aaaite
Im being honest kid, u look monstrous..
On the flip...
You should stick to beating off on girls who haven't regained consciousness.
^concept wasn't good enough for two lines i think. standalone this woulda been more impactful. also, rhyme is kinda awkward for me. shud'a been monstrous, bitch or smth. but i see the humor. so yea. kinda dece
U racist faggit, everything bout u a lie, believe it...
Cause when his family feud..u hosting a tall bald black guy the reason.
^u hosting a guy the reason? uhm. yea. this needed to be cleaned up
Imma seasoned vet, been thru many a campaign n go hard...
Only one this dude been thru was riding 'round stickn signs in ur front yard.
^okay. was decent
I put this square in a hole when the heater pops...
U hear the pop when i put a hole in this square..speaker box.
^this had nice rhymes. concept was good too. very solid line
Shadow boxing? I'm heavy handed, got the right cocked...
Fight u in rain or snow..then leave u bleeding in it like the nights watch.
^well, if ur connection is just leaving someone in the snow then it's too loose a connection. if u also tried to do a snow wp, then u didn't reference that anymore. cud'a been like, "then leave this bastard bleeding..." or smth. but the concept overall wasn't bad
vs.
You livin a fantasy lifestyle, he’s NEVER placed his hands on triggers,
Listen; If you’re EVER holdin Atreyu copped the never ending story action figure.
^cool
I got gun bars for days, but only need hands to leave son scar’d & maimed,
My fist’ll roll your frame so quick, it’ll put ANY high performance car to shame.
^aaaight
His chick a hoe & BEEN AROUND, but he think her sex is bomb or hot… shit,
Your girls pussy’s such a joke, when she spreads a circus tent an clowns hop out it.
^eh, kinda weak connection. also her pussy is a joke? & the rhyme was awkward cuz the syllables didn't match
I stay beaten dudes, so this geek is through once I bring the heat to you,
It’s ironic, I always got my face ‘n a pussy… & HUSH put you in line to be eaten too.
^okay
You love MMA? HA! I’ve molded greats, 1 swift kick’ll cause bones to break,
1st, I’m catch you w/ a leg sweep & take your Cavs out the game like Golden State.
^yea, this is cool
My flows insane… you just wack & a clown that’ll get smashed to the ground,
Honestly, if He be G, Bz? that’s the feelin female’s get when this faggots around.
^Bz? as in Bs? as in Bros? it wooorks, but it's not the smoothest. still a decent line
this was not a bad read. i was being critical in the breakdown, but both verses had some nice lines. so props yall. that said, dre had atreyu and cavs which i both thought were nice, one of them being lotb, doesnt rly matter which one. art had speaker box which i also thought was pretty cool. but in the end, dre had two hits to one, and also the better ones. so he takes this. good shit yall on showing so early.
v/dre
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