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Originally Posted by mayniuhh
actually it only verified that, if YOU don't see rhymes where YOU expect them to be, then YOU won't like it.
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Ok. Now I'm interested. This is all one stanza. I split it in half.
Dew hasn't risen, listen the
mist wishes to
steal a gem behind the
skin of my neck.
Chiefspeak; nothing to pimples
your bust it is simple:
^Some Cool Rhymes&Tempo Here Man. Followed by some BS below. And keep in mind I like your verse for the most part.
Yo call it's mom a leprous hooker
y'know, launch an offensive.
It's a
little lightning in this bottle,
enough to freeze about an
hour while the
might of 90 bolts'll
mop the ocean up.
Please Tell Me What I'm Missing. Where exactly are the "
unexpected rhymes"?
bottle/ bout an ?
lightning in this bottle / freeze about an hour ?
lightning / 90?
even if those guesses are right, they're not good rhymes. even if you weren't facing an opponent ffs.
Like I said, I know what it's like to "personally read it" maybe different than it might show to your audience. I don't even think that applies here though. You claim it does, so? ....
I'm not trying to harp. The reason I've made this post is
1) It's interesting and I'm curious, from a technical perspective and
2) Judging by your reply to Pat, you're still mouthing off, as though you had genius unexpected rhymes that we mindless slim shady drones can't see.
So, if you care to, can you please point out the hidden rhymes in the specific part I've quoted. (Your last large stanza. The one that might wanna leave an impresson).