You ain't a shooter. I thought this loser would try with a gun.
So while your arm try angles.. I'll be finessin to choke you out w/one.
^this was kinda all over the place lol. this style is fine, but if u do multiple connections in a bar and don't just focus on one, u have to make sure the connections are strong enough so ppl get them. see neighbor bars for good examples of that
You suck on RB. And the shit you post here's like a real crime.
So that shows in this spot you'll just be left tryin to fit in.. yield sign.
^this was pretty cool
My chain hang low. Girls think your a shrimp and a fuckin hoto.
So when your bitch want that horseback it won't just be my shirt w/ the Polo logo.
^i see where u're going w/ this, but u coulda referenced horseback in the setup, so the concept becomes clearer. becuz the idea was pretty nice
U a player tho? My girl a ho fo sho but I don't give warnings.
So go mountain dew her.. bc ur blood'll be splattered in that by morning.
^mount & do her? u're telling him to fuck ur girl becuz she's a ho? but that's cool cuz u'll kill him & drain his blood into a mountain dew can? idk man. i mean, the wp wasnt bad (ive never seen it), but then the flip was all over the place. maybe try and focus more. have the line be about the wp, the connection and nothing else.
You won't ever be good. I wish you would but you won't whore.
So dont get caught holding your breath faggot.. just die off that diving board.
^this was decent. the whole holding breath til he's good/diving concept is really good. the flip coulda been better, but this was still solid
vs.
Dis total devastation, 9 mil lift his soul & heavens waitin
Try me and that fukin arm'll Pop like shoulder separation
^aite
A Butcher wit dat machete, chopem up til his pics look blurred in da face
I'll do'em Deli style.. u'd think I was guarding Stephen Curry on da break
^okay
I rhyme makin hits.. I keep it Koo, u spittin all lies on ya shit
Cuz if eyespaz on da track.. I'd have to b a homosexual & sound like a bitch
^i think this been done here before, but okay
So fuk u & ur lil ass gun.. I suggest u squeeze tighter dude
Cuz I'll bring dat Tekken, dat'll put u in da air higher den a Street Fighter move
^never seen the wp. cool
Plus ur girls a slut but u love her, ill kill u both to make troubles worser
& dat'll crush ur Bond.. while ill make mine, after they try n lock me for double murder
^okay
well, cred got this. spaz's flips were too messy. but he's got good ideas. so if he cleans up his bars & makes em more concise, he'll be good. but yea. cred was more consistent and had better wording
v/cred
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