[Mr. J]

This was a dope battle, both of you really brought the A to game

Dead, As I always say, your verses are slicker than a banana bro
from the jump I could already tell that your verse handled though..
the way you carry out the rhythm of your piece so effortlessly is dope
and with sections like this

how i'm sentenced to this. sentences for senses, elicit
a bittersweet resentfulness way back to the minute
you realized, like i did, we're a shot in the dark
creating obstacles and clinging onto memoirs of hardship
bleeding hearts reclining in a carcass
4 walls, solid as a rock. a lamp and a carpet
traffic heavy. Jack and Pepsi. make me an offer

You are never to far off to keep a reader well fed & happy
I felt like you really shined & had a firm grasp on the subject
the ending was really amazing due to the works build up
I really enjoyed your verse

Razah, There's a lot to say about your verse..
it seems to be masterfully crafted from the start of the piece
I really enjoyed the first section just a little after the first 4 lines
although I really did enjoy the tornado hitting the room first
your piece focuses more on the visual aspect of the topic at hand
and you really know how to add characteristics to the piece
this whole section is a stand out for me..

Imagine my pain, left alone to wither & die
Got a glimpse of the sky that brought a sliver of life
Brought hope to my heart but I've been living a lie
These aren't tears, I promise, I blame the wind in my eye
Is this all in my head, I can't tell, but it's usually real
Forgive me for being rude, welcome, to the house that lunacy built
This is my temple of torture, my palace of pain
Where the picture is perfect but it's lacking the frame

really making your piece worth the read..very smooth work
I enjoyed your piece due to your ability to paint such a vivid image in my head
thank you...


V/Well this vote will be a tough one due to the enjoyment of both verses
I really enjoyed the idea that both writers ran with for this picture
they seem evenly matched for the most part, making this battle my BOTW
I can't really tell who to choose based on the technicality aspect of both writers
Dead came with a perfectly structured verse & Razah wrote a beautifully vivid piece
my enjoyment really came from Razah's verse though
it just seemed like something I really haven't read before..nice work fella's
this was a battle that's worth reading, so I'm going with Razah



v/Razah