[UnbornBuddha]

Lol, at the hair picture, Oh! golly.

Anyways, Veritas: the tree of life as a representation of our ideas and thoughts, but not just any idea our thought, the most noble, and majestic. Which, you deem to be as representational to the outlet of creative writing. The portals opens and the brain gets flooded with neuro-transmitters and endorphins, as the mind goes into a parasymapathetic unleashing a volly and flood of pathways, which our pen then describes, depending on how strong the surge is, and how connected one is to the tree of life, that can be described as the creative expansiveness from the heavens, the symphony from the most high, that is not separated from us, but completely intertwined with our minds. I enjoyed the take more than last week, and the execution was much more proficient. However, I felt some of the lines were still a bit indecisive. and focused too much on the neuro chemicals, and did not fully go on to portray the message until the end. Meaning, while yes it was impactful, particularly because of the format, some lines were just not that good. And the contrast between some of the lines that were good, and the ones that, in a relative sense weren't, was jarring. In other words, the piece at times did not feel cohesive and unified. Still, a strong take on the topic, and written well enough.

Clutbuck/ Lars: The route you chose directly attacked Veritas, or perhaps indirectly depending on how you choose to look at it. The route wasn't particularly mind blowing, the take was quite simple, even childish in a sense. God's existence is made up, something that is intrinsic in our thought processes since being little, and something we've all heard from the young agnostic, atheist, or nihilist, whether cynical or not. But, the spin on it that you did, from a child's mind, made the piece comical and made it attacking, but also truthful in a sense. One could relate to it, and find empathy in the words. It was skillfully done, the path could have backfired, but it didn't and while not the most intricate way to go, nevertheless it took footing and won the battle.

Vote: Clutbuck