V/ Dr Dog
His rhymes and phrasing in this are sick lol. appeared to be a theme of humans abusing/dirtying nature.
loved the flow- purposeful hesitations but kept it tight
"these postings go up- on reddit, your media served,"
i "lost it" on this line.. Too good ^
if i'm nitpicking i guess i'd say he seemed to ignore the "sphere" aspect of the picture, which seemed like a big part of the image. call me partial but the verse is good enough for me to forgive that.
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Ullr is clearly a talented writer, but here, the verse itself "set it's own bar too high", and then could not meet it. I hope that makes a modicum of sense.
I guess what I mean is, 4 stanzas, all of which exploring a different aspect of the main theme - this tribe - I feel like if it was a long epic poem would be a better medium to flesh it out and maybe win the vote.
But not in a 30-line battle. Especially due to the strength&tightness of the opponent's verse
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