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Old 06-08-2015, 06:54 PM   #14
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Nah, this was cool, man. For one I had a distaste with a bit of your imagery. The storyline, was awesome, but I felt you didn't expand. of course that's the contiguous foreshadow at play, but it was just a bit...off. Good, on task writing though. Everything seemed okay, but felt the shift from shoulders-realization of no more shoulders through metaphor was super fast. The abrupt ending was probablyyyyy part of it? But yeah.
yo do u even knwo what contiguous means, like slightly touching and shit? Your HS sophomore eng teacher still likes u but u are a non entity amongst non entities and are not good enough to critique black. Please meditate then try again thanks
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