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Originally Posted by _____
Dude an actor i gotta bet as far as bout it he the opposite
Aint no factor id put it on the set only time he'd shoot, is on the set
bad wording on a simple concept
Quit playing like you locked that down, she clearly want out you fool so let her
This dude associates with sexy females and still turned out to be a bitch, bruce jenner
too simple, not really effective as worded
I stay high off that dank dro, fuck bitches and fold mics
Of course u would be invited to bangbros, nigga you've done that ur whole life
light jab on played wp
Whats wrong with your lips ho, i think the rest you should try n salvage
U the only ncg no one would blame for taking the kylie jenner challenge
please. no
This that game of thrones flow, how you gonna get the crown being awful and boring
Only time i see Z's in succession someone in a comic book snoring
decent flip but setup was pointless and wording needs help
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Originally Posted by Zelphish
ur crew is a bunch of broke niggas. thats sum shit u needa renovate
cuz i can either lay a fixin' on u.. or u can get ur whole section 8
'lay a fixin' doesn't hit hard to me and 8/ate is played
& ur chicks a mess, she drools n shakes her tail all over..u like it schmuck
so u must love the fat 1's dog.. cuz evry bitch u've had was husky as fuck
like the concept but not worded well
fuck all ur acts, shows u put on, and all the roles that u lead in
they'll be callin u Aunt Viv.. the way i take out a Greedy bitch mid season
cool concept, bad wording
im givn Greedy str8 liqs, he gets girls but delivers the wrong pitch
wen it comes to quality puss ive got da Bombay, u got some well..vodka type bitch
liked the concept but the delivery was meh
werent u noob of the year or sumthn? we're in a dif class so u can nvr rob me
if he evr try n step into my kingdom he'll die, n ill phylum wit the rest of the bodies
more tie-ins would have made this hit harder, but still decent
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Both verses were underwhelming to me, and could use better wording. '______' didn't have the greatest concepts either so that definitely hurts. Most of your bars were misses because of too simple concepts or wording that derailed the punch. 'bangbros' and 'Z's' were less bad but still not really quotable. Zelph had much better concepts, and his wording seemed more rushed than horrible, so maybe it's just a time/effort thing. Aunt Viv and Bombay could have been dope worded diff, and the closer was aight.
Vote Zelphish - overall better verses with better concepts and fewer misses.