[Pent uP]

unborn -- A little over burdened did the verse feel. End Yoda speech. Everything felt a little over the top in this verse. Some of the imagery was over the top; some of the wording was over the top; and some of the rhyming was over the top. By over the top I mean that it seemed like you knew what you were doing but you were doing it too much...does that make sense? IDK. As far as the subject matter -- it definitely went over my head and I couldn't relate to it much, sorry.

Mr. J - I have mixed feelings here. First question: what is the real difference between father time and eternity? You can't really have eternity without father time, right? IDK, seems like a redundant character choice. I could see how I could be wrong, but I dont agree that they are different. Secondly, having multiple characters in a verse that is all dialogue makes it really confusing. I've done this before and it was hard to get through (in retrospect), and this was the same in that respect. Figuring out who was saying what, and trying to figure out if there were little idiosyncrasies or plays off the characters was a bit of a chore. That all aside, there was some nice soap box material here, and I liked the ending.

Overall -- this battle was hard for me to decide on, and I have to give it to the verse I found more ambitious. I think both were well done in their respective approaches but I think one verse encapsulated the idea of the tournament as well as painted a more in depth scope of ideas

vote - Unborn