Clut -- dope verse; a little slower than I remember from you, but nothing to wag my finger at. Description are on point and the ending had a really good contrast to the rest of the verse. I wanna know what polax is....I assume (because google didnt help) that it was a fictional weapon that vibrated at such low decibles it shook the building out of its foundation or something, but that was just me reading into it. It was good to read from you again, dope shit.
Snoop -- I thought what you did with the rhyme scheme was really impressive. I was seriously fixated on the syllable sounds and not the story for so long I had to reread it. A couple of loose threads and wording issues that I ran across, but nothing worth nitpicking too badly. I think what got to me here is that the story wasn't progressive, where Clut's was. You had a lot of setup and a quick & effective conclusion, unlike your opponent who had a lot of conclusive imagery and an interesting conclusion.
Vote - Clut in a dope one.
props to snoop for his schemes again
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Originally Posted by RichardCorey
I can't beat this Pent. I'll admit, on my best day, I couldn't beat this Pent.
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