LOL Patrick was on some other shit here, Veritas vs DBP needs to go down at some point on this tourney!
The take on the topic was hilarious, comedy verses always seem to do well in the topical realm for some reason I've noticed. Maybe they're just few and far between so it's more noticeable? Regardless, the concept was pretty original. The execution fell a little short, mainly because the first six or eight lines seemed to really just repeat what had been said prior to them and not move the storyline on at all haha! I have to say this is one of the more creative entries submitted in round one, and I guess given the theme of the tournament that should be praised pretty highly. I'm more of a linear writer Iguess in comparison so we do differ slightly in that aspect. Funny as fuck to read, though, first I've read from you unless you're an alias!
Certain: This was a solid enough piece, well executed and with some great wording, very crisp. Your writers voice is almost always commanding and I think that's a huge strength of yours personally when utilised like it was here. A lot of emotions attaced to imagery which makes it very relatable to the reader. Two very different styles and approaches but I can't help but feel Certain took this comfortably. I liked the humour in DBP's joint but Certain had more overall that impressed me here.
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