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Originally Posted by Zen
This was not good "lyricism". Never respond to someone's critique of you by trying to boost your ego back up because it never works.
ANYWHO, I don't know where to start with this because there was way too many dumb phrases in this for me to take this seriously. The "I'm not black, but I'm the next Rosa Parks" bar might have been the dumbest thing I've read in awhile. I'm not telling you this to be a dick, serious. I'm telling you this so that you won't write dumb shit anymore.
Don't talk about doing drive-by's in your mom's mini-van unless you do it or you're good enough lyrically for me to vibe with it (you're not). Actually, that criticism applies to your whole verse. None of it was believable. I felt nothing reading it and honestly stopped halfway through and started typing this feed.
Don't write shit YOU don't know about. Write what you feel, brah. Peace.
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I do write about how I feel, and this is how I feel. If you want a depression rap, I'll write you one. Want political? I got that on deck. What I meant by that lyric was that I am white, and like Rosa Parks, I will refuse to give up my spot until I'm forced. I'm sorry if this is too stupid, but again, I am 15, I'm not Kendrick myself. But thanks for your feedback.