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Old 05-31-2015, 07:08 PM   #2
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This was pretty dope to say the least. sorry I got back so late
crafting an 'actual' thought out verse takes time. I enjoyed though
you crafter a very poetic piece here. but the feeling was shortlived
I would have enjoyed it more if you added more upon this.
the ending fit well but I feel as though you could have finished better
not saying the verse is bad..you had an overall enthralling verse
keep it up breh.
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