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Old 05-27-2015, 05:32 PM   #5
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Yea I kind of had trouble working those lines in there
I could have left them out but it would have taken away from the 'freedom' I implied
Murals was supposed to blend into the finger paint section
I was going to take the Scarface approach after two girls and use world
but I feel that that usage of rhyme has done to death.
I was basically going for 'The Departed' based on the title
the 2 extra verses were to add closure instead of stopping at the end of the first verse
otherwise thanks for the feed and insight Obj. I'll peep your verse in a few
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