live or die? sometime soon enough i'll learn to decide
tonight we're something different. something static, alive
tomorrow's like a thought that slipped your mind. let it ride
^^This is very good.
I thought I'd fed this before? Guess not, but I know I read it when you posted it. Great work as always. Like others have said, it got better as it went along, but the only line I didn't like in the beginning was "we muddled our hands with everyday". It just didn't flow as well as everything before it and after it, but overall this was on par with everything else you've written which means it's god damn great. Keep on keeping on, Blacketh.
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