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Old 05-25-2015, 04:11 PM   #3
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Yo, the rhyme scheme on this was pretty dope. I liked how you kept switching it out every now & then, even though the last bar didn't rhyme with the rhyme before, the internal you started the bar with and finished with kept the flow smooth.

I felt like there were parts where I could rap this, but then the flow would switch up. I dunno if that makes sense to you... I rap these verses out loud and try to find like, what kind of bpm you spit the verse at. There were times where it was on point, then other times where it fell off "beat"

Good verse though, enjoyable read.
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