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Old 05-19-2015, 11:41 PM   #4
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Replace "of which" with "of these" and I think it's technically fine.

I'd also throw in a hyphen after 'competition'
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I'm going to start off on a tangent.

when I write, lately, I feel as if I begin by stringing together ambient ideas and concepts, then i realize I'm just typing the words coffee, tawdry, and autumn over and over and over, again, then I pass out dru-
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