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Old 05-19-2015, 11:04 PM   #3
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"The future Olympic judoka had no easy paths to the top, overcoming an early-childhood speech impediment, an insecurity-driven eating disorder and the heartbreaking losses inside and out of competition, the most emotionally resonant of which being the decline of her father’s health that culminated in his shocking, tragic death."

this sentence needs a lot of help.

i'm not trying to be a dick. i like the general tone of your writing. there are some seriously questionable word choices and sentence structure issues, however.
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