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Idk, been some time since I wrote anything and read anything so keep that in mind when I'm feeding you as I might be missing out on shit... But ye, this shit seemed kind of half assed at times,... well, not really half assed, but rather lazy in a way? I don't know, can't exactly put my finger on it. I can see the style you're going for and it's not the usual you the way I remember it but you still keep a certain refined standard somehow. However, it seems a bit simple at times as if you're cutting away too many syllables and just leaves it there because it sounds good, mainly thinking about this couplet:

''Thats a heavy cross to bear. His lies supplied
Theres a whole in my heart. Words can not define''
^ it just doesn't seem like it's finnished, like a sketch but not in a way as opposed to this couplet which is my fav in your piece:
''They say the good die yung. The bad arent supposed
Id rather live with that baggage. Than pass as a joke''
^ It still got that abrupt end in each sentence but it's complete in a whole different way.

Enjoyed the piece as a whole with its straight forward message and approach but I've definitely read shit I personally enjoyed a bit better from you. Cool to see you test out different shit and elevating your pen game in different areas at your level, keep it up.