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Originally Posted by Badi Alii
energetic rubble resting on my copacetic troubles
stuck in such pathetic bubbles, i've accepted liquid doubles
it's a good thing, this burn slimin my esophagus
i'm fine, it's fuckin obvious, i'm designed for these waters like a hippopotamus
i can be pompous i know, once this self-consciousness roasts
like an ostridge that chokes up on his vomit and croaks
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I know talking like this is more suited for feedback "where we normally do it". But I just wanna say that, to me, this is really good, from a rhyme/rhythm perspective.
If all your stuff was like this I doubt people would call it mediocre, etc.. And if they did- they'd be wrong.