I feel like you should have ended this with Nirvana is dead.
but it worked as it played out, but I'm saying if it was longer with depth..
you would have had a decently well written piece
not saying it isn't, but at the same time it isn't neat
you pull the memory together really well, and like most memories certain parts get patchy
so that is excusable, either way reading this piece made me happy...
happy that I don't write like this <3
just kidding it was cool
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