TopicalDood - Cinematic for sure. Signature stanza separation with refined descriptive language; an opaque lake observatory in a wintery Baskerville, tapping on the restart button as images play on the screen. So Grand Theft Auto seemed to be the boiler room for your metaphor, which what it said to me is that humans are destructive by nature - why not filter those emotions through a videogame database, where you can respawn again and again vs. getting the brunt of life's whiplash in actual real life. An outlet for the savage tendencies confided in us all. I could be off but this is my interpretation. You should check out 'Catch 22' by Jakki da Motamouth on youtube, think you would dig it. I also don't think this was pro-video games, but anti-videogames. Am I missing something with this match? lol
C.D.M - Wait, weren't you supposed to be supporting sports though? I'm assuming you both agreed to go against your topics, not for them. I mean, both offered interesting perspectives varying in execution. I'd say this was a well going examination of the ball dilemma. It hit good angles but the problem for me was not that it wasn't full of exuberant poetic language, but just that it was a bit dry. The narration didn't have a lot of energy to it. It felt like you were giving a formal lecture, like a children's psychology class session, thenstead of performing a rhyming presentation of words, ideas and concepts intertwining to form a heilstorm of intriguing sentiments to the reader. For instance I thought your angels and demons verse (if I remember correctly) was more energetic and I liked it more because of the way you involved the reader in this pact between writer and viewer. All the same, this was a beneficial attempt that barely made me vote against it.
My vote goes to TopicalDood by edging it with a more impressive big picture effect.
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