Split - This was insightful but decent. I thought you did a solid job of bringing into view an adolescent perspective speckled with teenage lust, and a little bit of personal wisdom. I don't think it came as full circle as I wanted it to; your grip on topicals travels a fine line between fine execution & ending up slender wristed down the pipe, no pun intended. I feel as though you should pack more umph in there, but then again that's just my style preference. I overload my lines often so it's reflecting in my feedback on your verse. By light designing standards, you performed up to the standards I expected from you but didn't knock the ball out of the park. There were opportunities; there always are.
Juxta - You had moments of shine with your wording and moments of gutter water. Two opposites which echoed the battle at hand. Sometimes you get too carried away with the direction you take and you miss out on paving the way for the reader to follow your story with ease and enjoy it as a movie. I found this more like a collection of post-it notes that stuck together and wasn't pleasurable to actively read through. It had good writing for the most part. I just don't think you created a smooth passage into the world of this boy. It was vague to me. Also, your take on celibacy was scattered and less focused than Split's support for sex, which might hurt you.
My vote goes to Split for a better argument: sex as a teenager has it's perks.
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