Awesome, didnt like "averaged" though - seemed too logical a word choice amidst such a stream of conscienceness piece. The reptition of some phrases was cool - fun nod to that in the third stanza. Ending referencing walden was great.
avenues, sunless and the last stanza was my favorite.. seemed unwilling to attach to the idea of her, or more purposely detached from the resolution, a gradual fade to history, with nothint to show for it at any point in time
*pours whiskey*
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? subtly? what the fuck is a subtly? i dont know what that is. can someone help me out?
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