[UnbornBuddha]

Deadman: The strategy you utilized here is one of revert. If we were to look at it from a military standpoint, perhaps from the eyes of Sun Tzu, you reverted or more exactly retreated, back into the more paradigmatic dead man. A dead man, which represents a fusion of ideas and abstractions meshed into a collage of sorts, so as to represent a greater whole of a concept through pixels. At times. some of the pixels are jumbled, so although the picture is conveyed, it is conveyed in a manner that was coerced into existence in a state of disarray, and maelstrom. Albeit, there was refinement, as made clear by the choice to be less restricted by rules and regulations of modern rap, such as multi's, and advanced rhymes schemes, for the choice of more vivid, less bound, and a more impassioned drama that is streamed into the reader's mind drop by drop. Although, I find the drops at times to be more acidic, and scalding due to the type of emotion being conveyed. A type of volatile emotion that is noticeably present in the voice that subconsciously is narrated, and pierces through each of your works. This is inevitable of course and you are adept at trying to remain enigmatic and invisible, as exemplified by your abstract lines that don't all go together sequentially, or linearly, but do in a more spectral way, in a more conglomerated way. Yet, sometimes this beatific force shines, and it is truly quite a magnificent thing to see unfold. I agree with some of the other commentators, I don't believe this is your best work, not even close. I've read open mics of yours, that are far more provoking, in terms of presence, and of your apotheosis, and of course gnosis.

NYCSPITZ: Your level of detailing is quite good, I always enjoy that part of your work. It shows you are a man of language, one who appreciates knowledge learned through mental exercises, exercises that work the brain's ability to absorb, and to learn more. Your writing shows a different man than dead man. Your writing, while more elegant and flowery, does not have the experience and richness that his does. You write what you will yourself to learn, and enjoy, but have not found who you are through writing. Your voice does not come through like Deadman's, your realizations, your biases, opinions, standards, fail to effuse out into the exterior, instead they sometimes just ruminate in the interior, without exposing the reader into the heart of the matter. Also, the content although enjoyable, I have read this story and caption from you already, although augmented, it definitely was a huge minus. Although, Deadman writes from a similar vein, he utilizes different portals of circulation, you, on the other hand, used the same vein to inject onto the reader your literary works. So indeed, what you brought to the match was a cliche, something that was expected out of yours, and others even jokingly stated you would. And then, knowing this joke, you went and did it. Although, the premise of this approach is quite humorous, I find it leaves a bittersweet aftertaste that is displeasing, particularly in the realm of creativity. Because while, it is creative due to its fantastical nature, it is still a realm of thought you have traversed us through in the past and has become a bit stale. Nonetheless, it was still a vivid experience, and you seem to be honing how to tell the adventure better and better, perhaps you'll reach the level of skill of an elder oracle, who expounds the same myths each and every night around the campfire, but each time it is spoken in different words, and almost feels different, offering new insights, the most memorable being those that portray and offer guiding words of wisdom.


Vote: dead man

Regardless, thank you both for the championship match, a memorable bout with two well-deserved contenders.