I liked both pieces here. Tyson, glad you are back at it. Very solid read, though, like others have mentioned, punctuation would have been a plus because your lines did just carry on & on. Nonetheless, the content was nice. I like the direction you went with the topic & it definitely blended well with the sort of poetic feel thrown in there. I definitely listened. Speaking of which, patrown, very short piece but I was definitely captivated by your writing. The "fine, die" line & the little suicide ending had me leaning, so you were able to really wrap me in with the way your presented your side of the topic. Now, the knock I have though is the fact that I wish you wrote a bit more. Tyson's piece has more depth & flexibility, filled with much content, but the lack of that in your verse I feel hurts you here. Great piece of work, just needed a bit more IMO.
MVGT: TYSON.
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