Cool syllabic display, but due to the nature of what you attempted to do, there was a lack of clarity, or better yet fluidity to the message of what it was trying to encompass. It is expected, seeing the restrictions that you placed upon yourself from a syllabic standpoint. Another gripe is that you sometimes broke it, which kind of went against the premise of what you originally sought to present. A decent display of prowess, but could have been executed with more thought, and uniformity.
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