[Split Eight]

I wouldn't say this is close to the worst thing in the OM.

For one, there's a rhyming component. Instantly better than the Muzzl3
Second, there's a semblance of plot/ purpose beyond just confusing people to then leave them slightly less confused in an elaborate deus ex machina or recycled aesop's fable moral.
Third, while all the flex concepts were cringey at least they were somewhat thought through.

Don't take this the wrong way YDK, but I've never been excited to read a YDK drop. Your writing is in the best of times 'solid'. The best analogy ever was Certain comparing someone to like a grinder in the bull pen- they might not have a great record, or be thrilling to read, or even be in the top tier of writers... But they're there every week, writing, making a difference.

But yeah. If all of the Open Mic was a library, and every verse was a book on a shelf somewhere, YDK verses would be the 1980-1990s Scott's Lawncare Professionals Almanac's reference series on proper detachment of the clippings bag. There would be about 35 volumes and even the person who wrote them would pretend they stopped existing after they came off the press.

I dunno what to tell you for advice, maybe to stop trying to express yourself in the way that you are.

Thank you