I enjoyed much of this, particularly the very core of it. You have a unique way of detailing emotion and capturing it via scenic metaphors, that are usually coaxed into the realm of hyperbole's. Thus, you thread on the line between the overexaggerated, while trying to keep a firm foot on the more gross aspect of existence, mainly the emotions, and the other associated aspects of the paleomammalian brain. You shape your behavior around its processes giving birth to a writing that possesses marks of poetic languor, accompanied by bouts of fervor that give the reader a very surreal experience. But, again it does have an abstract quality to it.
I thought the beginning line was a bit less enticing as what followed, which is understandable, but does provide obvious setbacks in the pace of the unfolding of the emotive abreaction. But, the biggest critique I can say is that the last line felt just too subtle, in the sense that it felt as if it ended abruptly, without any real closure to the rest of the writing, particularly the very core of it. To summarize, a pleasure, thank you.
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