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Old 04-27-2015, 10:39 PM   #6
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I liked the schemes, and the flow, which is attributed to the schemes no doubt. The content itself is, of course, a boost of the self. While, not my exact cup of tea, it nevertheless has an entertaining factor to it and was a nice ride. Can't say I truly enjoy the format, but nonetheless a worthy piece to spectate upon. One thing I did find a bit awkward was the constant repetition of Dave, which I know is your name, but it feels kind of contrived and takes away from the impact as a whole; It humanizes what is not intended to be so, as dictated by the braggadocio and self-entitlement throughout. Anyways, thank you.

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