wow, this was great. btw sorry for the sloppy reading of this, have to vote from my phone this morning
tropical,
man this is the very first thing ive read from you and i just gotta say you're very talented. you displayed raw emotion with some outstanding vocabulary intertwined with some good imigary. loved it. your operer in my opinion was flawless. i might come back after work on my computer and edit some favorite parts to both of your verses but for now lets just say i didnt find a lot that i didnt like in both pieces
cdm,
damn bro i really liked what you did with basically telling two stories here, the basic open eyed story then the underlining metaphoric point of view. your rhyming was impeccible and concept was real and that last line did in fact make me say oh shit, im going to be honest im going to go with cdm because i was an athlete and i guess i just enjoyed the sports references just a little more but it honestly could have gone either way. this was a pleasure to read
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