Tyson: Dope piece, kinda hard to follow your rhymescheme at times. Every now and then it seems a bit off, while other times it's kinda unique. Almost like a poem of some sort. If this was a poem it would have been cool with a bit of ''toughness'' to it for a poetry piece. Either way, I can't really get into the ''poetry-mood'' in a tournament like this so I got kinda thrown off by it. Overall it's a decent verse though, the shit you say make sense and I liked what you were saying. It just seemed... right to me somehow. Probably the my favourite verse from you yet. Keep it up.
Patrown: Short and cool. To the point with a whole bunch of lemons and bitterness to it. A fine message, but kinda ''bland''. Perhaps it's a common thing we all know but care too little about? Perhaps the message was stronger than I first anticipated as I look upon it as common sense and my brain is doing tricks on me.. Either way, I enjoyed the mechanics and the flow of your verse was dope and easy to follow. I like that. Kinda predictable how it turned out but I don't know if it could have ended a better way.
Vote: Hard to pick a winner here. Patrown got the mechanics and a decent story, Tyson got the poetry-ish going on and some stuff to his lines that makes me think a little bit. Both executed the topic given to them well and was on point.
After reading both verses again I enjoyed Tysons verse better actually. My vote goes to Tyson.. DOPE battle.
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