Hello UBB, you are extremely articulate. Your writing sometimes reminds me of Zygote, are you related? Are you the human spirit of his robotic essence? An interesting query to ponder..
Clearly, you have a unique talent for writing. The one thing that I constantly have issue with is the repetitiveness of your rhyme schemes. I would confidently say that almost any of the regular posters in this section could successfully achieve this type of format quite easily. I guess what I'm saying is that it seems to me like you try to think of every single possible rhyme for your selected scheme and it's just not needed, nor is it impressive.
I would suggest to you to take a few "must have" rhymes from your list and then move on and transition to something new; mainly for the readers sake to maintain interest and avoid boredom/fatigue.
Well done so far, and good luck in the AOWL, looks like you have a real shot.
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