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Old 04-09-2015, 04:08 PM   #4
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This reminds me of how I used to write the flow of ideas being brought out
the questions and answers I looked for, the ability to be more intuitive..
I enjoy pieces like these because they are more out of the box
the first few lines were great openers but it wasn't until the middle you did you
Atleast my perception of you. there's no restriction for you here
and you weaved together a very deep piece and worded it to perfection
I feel a few lines seemed off but it didn't take away from this at all
nice work either way keep writing breh..
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