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Old 04-09-2015, 03:34 PM   #10
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This was quite amazing. it read as a short story would
the structure of it made the flow seem much more refined
you broughta different element to the table and let it ride out
pretty smooth to say the least. you put out a very emotional vibe
added character between the small glimpses of issues as thy occur
very real..that's the word..'real'...nice work Zen keep it up..
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