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Old 04-02-2015, 07:07 AM   #5
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This was great. Rhyme schemes were impressive. You are getting much better at preventing your pieces from becoming vague or introspective to the point the reader is out of the loop, which is the only issue i had with your pieces, you avoided that here while maintaining the poetic and elegant style you execute so well. Really enjoyed this one.
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