I felt that the flow was very choppy in some places but besides that a pretty good piece. I checked out a few of your drops on nc before it crashed and I see that you've actually grown allot since then so props on that Joe. I loved the concept but as Geno and Deadman all ready mentioned it feels a little too short and condensed. Try elaborating on it a little more and get a clearer picture with it and I feel like this would be a dope ass drop holmes.
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