Obviously internal is a forte of yours.
"Roller rink of older things."
I like how you push the limits here. Mixing trickier ones like this in with the cleaner internals.
"my every
tide deadly"
-an end rhyme. Impressive. I'd call it advanced and original.
Your rhymes are plentiful but maintain the rhythm.
I like the part Dancake quoted; another one that caught my eye was
"...& drive to the beach
I guess this sky is in reach, deceiving humble
Too much free time, & weekend struggles..."
very nice phonetically.
If I had to say something negative I'd ask you wtf is "deceiving humble"?
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