Don't wanna pile on, so I only "kind of" will. As others may have mentioned, this is not very good Alii; I've seen better from you.
In my view the biggest problem is some very trite wording. And the last line is bad (beginning after the word dayquil). Get it out of there.
That being said I enjoy rapping it because your multi's are good. And I like the way the first couple lines sound.
"My 2 cents" is: mushing some of your lines together on the text, that's what I meant by quoting you abovebut changing the look of it as part of my feedback.
If you're willing to be here, and share this, and read what others say about it, then in my opinion you do belong here and don't have to retire. Good multis just be more clever with your phraseology. (cleverer?)
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