[PancakeBrah]

This was dope.

"a cracked soul, black hole, my mind's designed for interstellar
rhymes are primed for missions never fully dressed for presentation"

Ok, CopyPat. HOW MANY SYLLABLES DO YOU NEED TO RHYME!?

This really picked up after the first section. Not that that was bad, I just feel that the following three were on a different level. Maybe because I felt the point of the piece started from the second section on. Maybe I missed something, but the first section seemed a little out of place. Less conscious and pointed. It also included the only phrasing that seemed clunky (heavy written clever). Solid, but outdone by what followed.

"I've learned no man inspires hate like the man who demands love
and the planet's entire weight is a gavel that slams -
plus, too many hunger for a seat at the table, the ravenous land stuck
I'd rather let hunger strike and stay famished to stand up"

Finishing the second line's rhyme at the beginning of the third is the kind of stuff I really enjoy. Lets the reader know your cadence, adds something to it. Something that someone who skims through won't catch. This whole section was smooth. You're dropping some knowledge, but it doesn't come off as preachy due to the "I've learned" start. It allows the reader to disagree; it's just your perspective. Where people fail in pieces like this is they just present their thoughts and it comes off like they're stating them as fact. You're just providing an opinion. 'Ravenous land stuck' was good wording.

"life's a feast of absurdity, I'm far too sheepish for certainty"

Probably the standout line to me. Mostly because I agree with the sentiment, and it was executed well.

"they say environment picks up for where genetics are careless
meaning "you" are just a mixture of your friends and your parents
any sense of awareness boasted is illogical strides
life's a stage of nurtured monologues and genomic asides"

Bolded was well put. The other thoughts in this quote are well-trodden but the writing helped make it palatable and somewhat fresh.

"if I retract all my answers, the questions remain
so keep repeating "fuck the world" like a lecher's refrain
no pressure to be prescient - nothing's more precious than pain
less is more, more or less, so bless the sects who abstain"

Good ending, good ending line. 'nothing's more precious than pain' reminds me of deadman's "Static" piece. Check it out. You guys would be friends.

So the whole vibe I caught was that people really don't know shit. And thinking that you do is laughable. Also, there were hints of predetermination (with the genetics/nuture/parents/friends stuff). I just generally agreed with what you were saying, which always makes a piece more enjoyable. The mechanics and technical skill were, as usual, top tier.

Thanks for the read!