strong conceptual flow building off of your opener (1 and 2). solid flow too, perhaps one too many syllables in 7 compared to 8 - but it worked. After going 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8 -- I found your closer to be a bit predictable, but it was effective none-the-less, and rounded out the verse well.
very consistent verse, good shit strikta!
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well fed.
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