[Split]

RG. Okay, flow wise this was pretty good.. I think I'm reading pieces too critically. There are spots where this didnt quite string together and some where it really got rolling for a handful of lines. It "worked" everywhere. Not being sarcastic lol just noting that a piece doesn't have t come together on some otherworldly shit to sound right.
Some of your phrasing is painful. Not wording, like as a sentence and even coherent blocks of text your verse comes together well, but your poetic license is needlessly brandished at a lot of checkpoints here.
Ex:
Peering at you daringly detrimental
Speared unsuccessful
Domineeringly so
I feel like in these places you're poetically expressing yourself when there is a more succinct way to say it in English. As you play with your rhyme schemes and master transitions (which I think is the weakest part of your mechanics) it'll be easier for you to sort thru words and have more selectively natural diction.
Your verse is also metaphysically clunky. To use Adonis as a convenient reference point, his metaphors etc take place of a large chunk of text and make his writing sharper and more directed. It's in your best interests to word things as elegantly as possible, basically. And this piece was lacking that, while showing signs of your capacity to do so in your comfort w/ unorthodox wording.

Adonis.
Ok, your piece was a lot harder to digest than RG's. really went ham with the figurative language. The ending was supreme. A cool little exposé perhaps on your own life? While there wasn't much room for character development, you went the route of describing a feeling, a state/ set of emotions- that definitely (as a method) appeals to me. I haven't read other people's votes out of general voting principles, but I feel like typically this descriptive piece never grabs votes.. Idk, pisses me off

This was a cool clash. Both sides portrayed their half of the topic as the superior side. Red Glare's ambitious wording, deep-running plot (and subplot) and superior store presents a strong case for optimism..
The belief in extenuating circumstances, the contrast between the characters of Angelo and NamelessWife1 and their views on life, aided by effective use of secondary characters, all made a good case for the powers of optimism (and against absurdism) that was muddled by still developing style and execution

Adonis' short, poignant piece made for a cool vignette of a life where evil triumphed over good, and belief in the worst of himself made a sort of ambitious, sickeningly self-justified self-loathing that's weakened by superficial storytelling- especially compared to the grand efforts of his opponent

I think if Adonis had came full tilt he could've taken this. Red Glare gets my vote