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objective - at first i didn't understand the intro. i think the first two lines could have been transitioned into the idea of commercial music in general.. you jumped into it pretty quick for prompting some reflection from your audience. you made some good points here about commercial music being powered by its audience. indeed, many of the commercial heads started off somewhere and had a local following before they blew up. and you pretty much said fuck those people with your closing statement, so i'm not going to praise you for that. but i respect your opinion and the piece is written well.. even if a little bland, i think perhaps the tone was suiting the topic.
king keith - as others have said, you set the tone as if i'm in a classroom awaiting instruction. make an assertion, back it up with a straight up statement, grab attention with some italics and some ominous language.. boom. you're a teacher. good fucking method right there. if i ever have a need to set a tone like that i may follow that formula and i'm giving you credit for that right here and now. you really did an amazing job tackling the topical.

/v -king keith, you destroyed it.