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alright. i'm going to be brief here, because i already posted a well thought out vote that is no longer.
only saying why i voted how i did, good verses from both here.

/v topicaldood5 - you said a lot about the gamer and the video game. you did a good job of using assonance here, places where syllable counts were questionable - you came through with either developments or imagery.

cdm- you hit the nail on the head from a participants perspective. i can't really vibe with phrases like, "an attitude that’s bad" or "baskets making them all frown" a little bit of lax grammar and overly direct descriptions took away from what could have been a more emotional piece. you made some strong points, and i went through the story without losing interest.however, i feel like a bit more imagery and/or a conclusion drawn directly from the astute observations would have given you the victory.