View Single Post
Old 04-16-2013, 05:25 PM   #9
Xces
Member
 
Xces's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2013
Posts: 66
Battle Record: 2-0



Rep Power: 38
Xces is on a distinguished road
Default

Innovator - I this you really stuck out and handled the topic you were given well an I agree with Zen in that your middle stanza was the strongest one in the piece.
lol an yea the misspelled words, but w.e shit happens, your name isn't Webster.

Ink - I like the way you explored a young minds interest in science being peaked through smoke an mirrors of a science teacher trying to make learning fun for his students. Then the realization of his choices later in life and how he had been fooled to believe it was all magic like that. I think your wording this week was a bit of a hold back and it pulled away from the piece despite the beautiful take of the topic.

This one was really hard, I think Inno has this on overall flow, but Ink had a lot more creative and original view of his topic.

V/ Innovator

Ink had a good piece but it felt drawn out because of poor wording in some places, which unfortunately drew away from the piece enough to out weight his creative depth within the piece.
__________________
"A culture is only as great as its dreams, and its dreams are dreamed by artists."
-L. Ron Hubbard
Xces is offline