Wow.
Bent - You came way harder then I've seen you come before.
The flow an the story you tell in that chapter is golden, I love the wording I mean there are one or two places it's off, like Topical brought up but nothing immensely distracting.
I love how you incorporated historically significant things within the piece, well staying within the time frame. That was brilliant.
Poh - The story you told and the picture you painted is solid, I don't have many issues with your piece here either. There are a few bars that are stretched for the rhymes but you maintained a story very well so I let that go.
I enjoyed both of these pieces pretty much equally, so I have to vote from a technical standpoint, and on that I have to give it to Bent.
V/Bent
The stretched bars from Poh did a bit more draw back then the story within made up for in the face of a solid piece by Bent.
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