[PancakeBrah]

Needs more multi's.

The first thing I noticed, and maybe this is just preference, but I definitely would've started off the piece with the "I'm not a photographer for two reasons" line, and then transition to the fact you took pictures today. I don't know. Grabs the reader, is kind of funny.

I do like how you broke up each paragraph with one of the pictures you (presumably) took that day. It makes the piece feel like the reader's there, next to you, as you take a picture, talk, take a picture, talk, etc. I read too much into things like that, so maybe it wasn't your intent. But I dug it.

I liked your first two paragraphs. They were cohesive and I enjoyed reading them. After then it became more broad. Which isn't bad. It became a more stream-of-conscious type deal once the third paragraph started.

In the end, I got a really 'blog-like' feel to this piece. A bit more personal and self-involved (not in the negative connotation) than the other entries I've read from you. Kind of idle, this. A tiny bit scatter shot, with faintly seen through lines. Kind of an affirmation of your feelings and self in this setting in the end. I enjoyed reading it, and the thoughts were clear. Maybe I just expected a little more or something? My natural mode is to nitpick though. Thanks for the read.