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Old 01-12-2015, 08:24 AM   #12
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I feel like it takes me thousands of words to accomplish what you do in 16 or so couplets. The narrative arch was really unique for this kind of writing, and really effective. Great undermining of common phrases, I particularly liked the "settled for each other cuz we've settled for worse" and "all it gave me was a tolerance boost." The latter is such a perfect description for putting up with someone you genuinely don't care much for as an exchange for pussy. Time is poorly invested currency when it comes to getting a nut.

At any rate, this was dope, glad I typed the letter N on my search bar when I did.
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