Netcees - View Single Post - AOWL Week 9: IamBenT (4-1) vs. Pohfig (5-1) [IAMBENT WINS, 7-3.]

Soulstice · 04-16-2013, 12:25 AM

ah was just searching to finish up my voting requirement tonight. definitely a battle to vote on.

lambent - particularly strong opener and closer. if im going to dissect the precise wording of a piece it is going to be there and you opened the piece in a way that made me interested and closed it in away that had me satisfied. the wording was nice, except for muscle expansion, and a few other instances. the historical references were top notch and a challenge here was to make sure all of the works were published before 1884.. no easy task. as far as i can tell they all were. this biographical piece, reminiscent of baron mynd and bounce (two extraordinary writers) was no easy task to create yet the historical parts and the imagery both made it work. the story was paced well, and the stanzas switching style could perhaps hearken to the eclectic talents and influences of roosevelt himself. a true renaiisance man. ultimately, a biopic piece could never capture his full essence so you had to settle for a mere chapter. the untold story of the motives and creation of the ambition that developed him. an origin story of a superhero. well done

pohfig - in the end god is laughing at our plans. a purge of the streets a vigilante undone by dumb luck. ultimately that is what this piece comes to. complete with the motives, and a little background, a very full, round character that we expect to succeed but cant escape the blind wrath of death in eddard stark fashion. a completely original concept and execution, with a little conceptual stuff thrown in at the end to make it more than a story. overall the flow was tight, the wording left a little to be desired but the entire life the language took on was consistent and appropriate for the peice anyways.

v- ugh. two entirely different pieces that i am having a lot of trouble comparing. fuck. ill edit something in later. most likely tmm after i sleep

edit. i edited this on the artofbattling domain. it doesnt relink to netcees unless you go to the main domain. anyways i chose iambent. tough decision though

04-16-2013, 12:25 AM	#6
Soulstice native system Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 387 Battle Record: 18-21 Champed - Short-Verse Topical Rep Power: 4453411	ah was just searching to finish up my voting requirement tonight. definitely a battle to vote on. lambent - particularly strong opener and closer. if im going to dissect the precise wording of a piece it is going to be there and you opened the piece in a way that made me interested and closed it in away that had me satisfied. the wording was nice, except for muscle expansion, and a few other instances. the historical references were top notch and a challenge here was to make sure all of the works were published before 1884.. no easy task. as far as i can tell they all were. this biographical piece, reminiscent of baron mynd and bounce (two extraordinary writers) was no easy task to create yet the historical parts and the imagery both made it work. the story was paced well, and the stanzas switching style could perhaps hearken to the eclectic talents and influences of roosevelt himself. a true renaiisance man. ultimately, a biopic piece could never capture his full essence so you had to settle for a mere chapter. the untold story of the motives and creation of the ambition that developed him. an origin story of a superhero. well done pohfig - in the end god is laughing at our plans. a purge of the streets a vigilante undone by dumb luck. ultimately that is what this piece comes to. complete with the motives, and a little background, a very full, round character that we expect to succeed but cant escape the blind wrath of death in eddard stark fashion. a completely original concept and execution, with a little conceptual stuff thrown in at the end to make it more than a story. overall the flow was tight, the wording left a little to be desired but the entire life the language took on was consistent and appropriate for the peice anyways. v- ugh. two entirely different pieces that i am having a lot of trouble comparing. fuck. ill edit something in later. most likely tmm after i sleep edit. i edited this on the artofbattling domain. it doesnt relink to netcees unless you go to the main domain. anyways i chose iambent. tough decision though Last edited by Soulstice; 04-16-2013 at 03:59 PM.